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I like the first stanza, there is a flow to it that's kind of weird and magical. I think the sentiment of being in battle with yourself is universal, and ...

Preach to their friends of how you life the lid on life, death and everything in the mid(dle). this part didn't really make sense to me. this is pretty straightforward, ...

maybe there's an audience for this kind of poetry, but this really didn't speak to me in any way. it seems needlessly wordy without anything substantive or poetic to say. ...

No one can match the way her breasts move en sposina with each breath she takes as she sings sweetly on silver. this is pretty generic, pretty predictable. lots of ...

seems needlessly wordy. i think there is way too much introspection here, even it is just a first part. i didn't find myself so fascinated by the narrator's thoughts that ...

i wasn't captivated, but i think it's cool that you're asking these questions. unlike most stories on this site, this feels honest and personal. i like the idea of someone ...

I know, my opinion is pretty much outweighted. But-- I just think it works better like this. Even if it is confusing, that's a good thing. For this? Of course ...

Somehow that red-faced, squirmy, worm like creature that emerged from the blood and mucus inside my uterus is over any percent of perfect. this line is really cool. your voice ...

"their" not "there" i think this works, but the 8) 8) cheapens the effect somewhat.

this was interesting to me in that it grabbed my attention (lots of things don't) but i think i might feel differently about it depending on whether it was based ...

you have some nice ideas here but i couldn't help feeling isolated from the narrator. he gets bullied for a year then decides to commit suicide. the question is, so ...

Our love is like a plotline We know what’s going to happen but we don’t want to say it yet If this is intended as pessimistic (though I suspect you ...

They said she began to loose it when the drugs took over her soul - I dont think she ever had it Therefore the drugs just made her whole. This ...

His brain hardly had time to register this, hardly had time to register that he was wrong, that the man was giving him the best gift of all, before the ...

This is interesting. Though I can't really put any of it together, there is a compelling sadness to it all that keeps you reading. Some of it seems pretentious and ...